Friday, May 6, 2016
Editorial Report 15A
Content Change
I don't think there was any content change. I added my last name. Probably phrased it all better.
Form Change
Well it changed from script into video, so that's a pretty major change there. It's presenting the form more correctly because its a video essay, so it would make sense that it would be in a video now.
Selection from Rough Cut
Hi everyone, well it’s me, Alexis, I’m coming to you today to talk about everything that’s happened this semester in a moment of self reflection upon my different writing experiences in this English course. To start off with I’d like to say that this has been the most effort I’ve had to put in to an English class probably in years, it was a ton of work. The major points of reflection in this work include my new skill of time management, how working in different genres before all this was helpful, and how working with others throughout the course was a big deal.
Re-edited Selection
Intro
Editorial Report 15B
Content Change
There are changes in some of the words. I cut out some of the stuff, or it might've been moved to other sections of the video
Form Change
Well it changed from script into video, so that's a pretty major change there. It's presenting the form more correctly because its a video essay, so it would make sense that it would be in a video now. It also is a bit more seamless video instead of rough an unedited. Added in example of ant observation so others could feel my pain
Selection from Rough Cut
I came into this class like, alright I got this it's just English. And I promptly missed the first deadline. It flew by me and I practically hadn’t even noticed it until the next day and half of those awful long blog posts weren’t even close to being done. I think this course has been primarily a learning experience in time management, because balancing about 20 blog posts throughout the first couple of projects was not something I had prepared for , especially when I then added 10 hours of ant observation every week to the pile, the time within which I could do the necessary work for this class was shortened even more. I gave myself the weekend always, but with the 20+ blog posts it was still majorly rough. Real time management didn’t come to me until after the first project was done and most of the second project was done as well. By then post size had been halved so it was easier.
Re-edited Selection
BP 1
Tuesday, May 3, 2016
Open Post to Peer Reviewers
Whoo heres the video essay now
Key Info
When this says rough copy it's not playing around. This is just straight video of me, without any editing so some of it may be me making weird faces or awkwardly quiet because of people. I plan on adding transitions and a lot of other things to give it more character. There will be background music and the like. Just not yet. And the ants at the beginning of the video- whoops. That's footage for a different point.
Major Weaknesses
I think a big part of the weakness so far is that it is so rough cut. And that its just me right now. I only hope it saves properly and gets uploaded properly. So it may be even rougher than expected
Major Strengths
I'm real casual and honest about all of this this time around. Made it real simply and plain because I think that's what best fits the tone of the piece since its a personal reflection.
Rough Cut
Key Info
When this says rough copy it's not playing around. This is just straight video of me, without any editing so some of it may be me making weird faces or awkwardly quiet because of people. I plan on adding transitions and a lot of other things to give it more character. There will be background music and the like. Just not yet. And the ants at the beginning of the video- whoops. That's footage for a different point.
Major Weaknesses
I think a big part of the weakness so far is that it is so rough cut. And that its just me right now. I only hope it saves properly and gets uploaded properly. So it may be even rougher than expected
Major Strengths
I'm real casual and honest about all of this this time around. Made it real simply and plain because I think that's what best fits the tone of the piece since its a personal reflection.
Rough Cut
Monday, May 2, 2016
Peer Review for Time WIls
Who: Tim Wils
What: Final Production Report 2
Activity: I think I made a content suggestion, or at least hinted that the phrasing could be confusing towards the purpose of the singular paragraph that was presented.
Helped: Hopefully I helped
Incorporated: Clarity
Admired: He was quite honest on what sorts of feelings he had had during the process and that honestly really gives him a sense of credibility in the writing and the experience overall.
What: Final Production Report 2
Activity: I think I made a content suggestion, or at least hinted that the phrasing could be confusing towards the purpose of the singular paragraph that was presented.
Helped: Hopefully I helped
Incorporated: Clarity
Admired: He was quite honest on what sorts of feelings he had had during the process and that honestly really gives him a sense of credibility in the writing and the experience overall.
Friday, April 29, 2016
Production Report B
More of my script, very very rough sorry
Form
Same as the other one, it's still in script form which I think fits well. I did include some sort of transition things I may want to add to give it some humor and so its not just my face people are watching in the video. It's rough but it is just right now scratch ideas.
Genre
It fits genre conventions, because its stick with the idea that this will be generated into video format soon and its a script to read and for some formation of the other dynamics of the video
Outline Item
Work in Different Genres
Adaptation of Outline Item
The third project was most comfortable to me because it was public argument *scene from Legally Blonde about being comfortable about using legal jargon in everyday* and so I did it in my most comfortable format, the essay. I’ve probably written like 200 essays in my life so it was easy to get this one out of the way and done pretty well if I do say so myself. It was a good one to do during the time period it was, with a lot of other projects and tests I was able to finish it well. It seemed like a lot of how well it went in this class was connected with how you paired the projects with a certain genre.
Form
Same as the other one, it's still in script form which I think fits well. I did include some sort of transition things I may want to add to give it some humor and so its not just my face people are watching in the video. It's rough but it is just right now scratch ideas.
Genre
It fits genre conventions, because its stick with the idea that this will be generated into video format soon and its a script to read and for some formation of the other dynamics of the video
Outline Item
Work in Different Genres
- I have previous experience in lots of genres, conventional writing, poetry, video, podcast, blog platforms
- Proof share? show poetry and/or other podcast?
- This has probably helped me this semester
- I already knew different format conventions for the different genres so I knew what to expect a little better
- How mucbh did it helped tho?
- I was still fucking confused
Adaptation of Outline Item
Overall I didn’t have problems with the subjects in this class that we were analyzing, I had previous experience in analysis of rhetorical situations, perhaps not in the exact way this class presented it but definitely before. In fact nearly my entire last english class was about analyzing strategies within works and it feels like that helped tie in a bunch of research in this course.
Now I want to talk to you about the different genres we did in this class, and how I think I had a bit of a leg up on it all, and that maybe that helped me overall. The different genres we had to do included a standard college essay, a podcast, a video essay and a QRG. I started off with a QRG and it went fine, but I still don’t exactly know what a QRG is.I figured with writing experience it couldn’t be that hard, having written plenty of papers, poems and blogging otherwise it couldn’t be that bad. I still don’t know where I went wrong. *slow dramatic panning over QRG with some crime show like music dramaaaaa*
The podcast for the second project went a lot better. My experience with podcasts was a lot more recent too, I had just created one the previous semester with my roommate, and while the podcast never went farther than a few episodes, combining that with my knowledge of how a podcast should sound from listening to things like Welcome to Nightvale, and Wolf359 *show cover art for both*, I was able to formulate my podcast pretty damn well. I knew how much speaking and transitional music would give it a professional quality and not distract or detract from what was being said. So I think in that instance I really had used my previous experience to my advantage in regards to conventions and the like
The third project was most comfortable to me because it was public argument *scene from Legally Blonde about being comfortable about using legal jargon in everyday* and so I did it in my most comfortable format, the essay. I’ve probably written like 200 essays in my life so it was easy to get this one out of the way and done pretty well if I do say so myself. It was a good one to do during the time period it was, with a lot of other projects and tests I was able to finish it well. It seemed like a lot of how well it went in this class was connected with how you paired the projects with a certain genre.
Thursday, April 28, 2016
Production Report A
WHoo starting in on that good ol rough draft are we, yes we are, I am exhausted but fuck it here it goes. SOmewhat
Form
The form for this adaptation of the outline is just in script form, as I'm trying to get it done quickly so that I can film it soon. The form is very loose since I mostly just want to talk to the camera freely since it's a personal reflection and not a specific study or argument like the previous projects. I think in the genre convention sense this fits with video essay because its a script in the loose sense and there's a lot that will be up to the situation that I will be recording in. Also its very rough because I gotta figure it out as I go
Production
The production challenge here was feeling he motivation to actually get the work done instead of just sleeping or studying for a test tomorrow or any number of things that also really need done. But whatever its coming along pretty well if I do say so myself. Creative epiphany: I may not be able to do an Elle Woods video, I can certainly include at least one clip from it.
Outline Item
Opening:
Introduce myself and what I'm going to be talking about (me), discuss premise of the work, meaning why I'm talking about it, what exactly I'll discuss which i think will be how this helped me with time management and where/how I often worked. I don't think I'll need much to grab attention except for myself, I mean come on pretty girl (considering the Elle Woods Harvard entrance video type of video essay because wouldn't that be hilarious).
Body:
Time management
Adaptation of Outline Item
Form
The form for this adaptation of the outline is just in script form, as I'm trying to get it done quickly so that I can film it soon. The form is very loose since I mostly just want to talk to the camera freely since it's a personal reflection and not a specific study or argument like the previous projects. I think in the genre convention sense this fits with video essay because its a script in the loose sense and there's a lot that will be up to the situation that I will be recording in. Also its very rough because I gotta figure it out as I go
Production
The production challenge here was feeling he motivation to actually get the work done instead of just sleeping or studying for a test tomorrow or any number of things that also really need done. But whatever its coming along pretty well if I do say so myself. Creative epiphany: I may not be able to do an Elle Woods video, I can certainly include at least one clip from it.
Outline Item
Opening:
Introduce myself and what I'm going to be talking about (me), discuss premise of the work, meaning why I'm talking about it, what exactly I'll discuss which i think will be how this helped me with time management and where/how I often worked. I don't think I'll need much to grab attention except for myself, I mean come on pretty girl (considering the Elle Woods Harvard entrance video type of video essay because wouldn't that be hilarious).
Body:
Time management
- Much of the work I accomplished on the weekends because of other work
- Proves I learned scheduling
- Working straight for 5 hours- efficient? bad? Doing most my work in a tea shop and how that probably helped or hindered
- Socializations effects on my work and quality of work
- studies on how much work is good at a time
- Choosing which blog posts and the like would be done first and which I could quickest and what needed to be in certain order, weighing to pros and cons I suppose
- Balancing work load
Adaptation of Outline Item
Intro:
Hi everyone, well it’s me, Alexis, I’m coming to you today to talk about everything that’s happened this semester in a moment of self reflection upon my different writing experiences in this English course. To start off with I’d like to say that this has been the most effort I’ve had to put in to an English class probably in years, it was a ton of work. The major points of reflection in this work include my new skill of time management, how working in different genres before all this was helpful, and how working with others throughout the course was a big deal.
Body P 1:
I came into this class like, alright I got this it's just English. And I promptly missed the first deadline. It flew by me and I practically hadn’t even noticed it until the next day and half of those awful long blog posts weren’t even close to being done. I think this course has been primarily a learning experience in time management, because balancing about 20 blog posts throughout the first couple of projects was really terribly hard with everything else, especially when I then added 10 hours of ant observation every week to the pile, the time within which I could do the necessary work for this class was shortened even more. I gave myself the weekend always, but with the 20+ blog posts it was still majorly rough. Real time management didn’t come to me until after the first project was done and most of the second project was done as well. By then post size had been halved so it was easier.
I think a main part of my time management came through that I would always work for about 5 hours straight at Scented Leaf, the tea place I spend my life at. I would go and do this nearly every Saturday and get the majority of work done. Perhaps not efficient use of time but it was how it started out. Of course this eventually morphed better where I wouldn't only take that time to do all the English work, spreading it out during the week , which was necessary because of both the workload and because I had begun to make friends at the tea house that would endlessly talk to me and my work was no longer undisturbed or efficiently done. So there were pros and cons of working there.
Another aspect of the time management for this class was trying to prioritize things like blog posts and research and writing. I had to figure out what I could get done in a certain amount of time and what could stand to be late or done in ten minutes to be redone later, better. I don’t have much to add to this yet gotta think about it. But i want to talk about it. This class overall has helped me with getting better at time mangement yeas
Wednesday, April 27, 2016
Production Schedule
Opening:
- What is to be done: Writing of script, record self. pick background intro music
- Location: somewhere outside? woman's circle perhaps it's very pretty
- Planned date & time: Hopefully script is written by tomorrow, video hopefully by Friday
- Resources required: Computer, me
- Date completed:
- Changes made after completion & reasons why:
Body:
- What is to be done: writing of script, recording myself, take screenshots of other work to show in this section, choose music
- Location: Different places, probably smart to do some of it in the tea shop since I did half the work of this class there. Maybe my room, outside again
- Planned date & time: This weekend, next week will be revision
- Resources required: Computer, me myself and i
- Date completed:
- Changes made after completion & reasons why:
Closing:
- What is to be done: writing script, recording myself, finish it off strong with some motivational music probably
- Location: outside, or this one will be somewhere else that I haven't filmed before, somewhere to make the video seem full circle
- Planned date & time: also this weekend, i want to have a completed rough of everything by this weekend so I can get everything else done
- Resources required: Computer once again
- Date completed:
- Changes made after completion & reasons why:
Content Outline
And now on to the final project! I'm trying to get ahead on this parts so I can begin recording because it's a video to do!
Opening:
Introduce myself and what I'm going to be talking about (me), discuss premise of the work, meaning why I'm talking about it, what exactly I'll discuss which i think will be how this helped me with time management and where/how I often worked. I don't think I'll need much to grab attention except for myself, I mean come on pretty girl (considering the Elle Woods Harvard entrance video type of video essay because wouldn't that be hilarious).
Body:
Time management
Work in Different Genres
Closing:
Closing this project I will express my joy at being done, my enjoyment of the class and why this project was even worth doing. This all overall was important because my writing style has probably changed a lot over just this single semester and I will be surprised to see how much more it may change. This self reflection is important to see how character has changed in relation to work and how my motivation for writing is more driven now that I know I can accomplish so much in so short a time.
Opening:
Introduce myself and what I'm going to be talking about (me), discuss premise of the work, meaning why I'm talking about it, what exactly I'll discuss which i think will be how this helped me with time management and where/how I often worked. I don't think I'll need much to grab attention except for myself, I mean come on pretty girl (considering the Elle Woods Harvard entrance video type of video essay because wouldn't that be hilarious).
Body:
Time management
- Much of the work I accomplished on the weekends because of other work
- Proves I learned scheduling
- Working straight for 5 hours- efficient? bad? Doing most my work in a tea shop and how that probably helped or hindered
- Socializations effects on my work and quality of work
- studies on how much work is good at a time
- Choosing which blog posts and the like would be done first and which I could quickest and what needed to be in certain order, weighing to pros and cons I suppose
- Balancing work load
Work in Different Genres
- I have previous experience in lots of genres, conventional writing, poetry, video, podcast, blog platforms
- Proof share? show poetry and/or other podcast?
- This has probably helped me this semester
- I already knew different format conventions for the different genres so I knew what to expect a little better
- How mucbh did it helped tho?
- I was still fucking confused
Working with Others
- I worked with others a lot in this course
- People in class on their project and teamwork for little project
- Collaborations on podcasts for voice differences, that one time we had to make a video essay in class
- Importance of having others check over work
- Peer reviews helped in most cases
- Boyfriend found like 10 instances of "quite ridiculous" in my last essay
Closing:
Closing this project I will express my joy at being done, my enjoyment of the class and why this project was even worth doing. This all overall was important because my writing style has probably changed a lot over just this single semester and I will be surprised to see how much more it may change. This self reflection is important to see how character has changed in relation to work and how my motivation for writing is more driven now that I know I can accomplish so much in so short a time.
Monday, April 25, 2016
Peer Review for Rhiannon Bauer
Who: Rhiannon Bauer
What: Revised Post to Peer Reviewers
Activity: Copy-Editing Suggestion
I suggested a lot of edits that would help increase her arguments impact and make her argument more clear, like changing wording and emphasizing some ideas. As well as cleaning up some of the phrasing. I did this all in direct editing or suggestions and not actually in a comment post.
Helped?
I think I helped a lot, I gave her a bunch of suggestions to help the essay flow a little better and show her argument more clearly.
Incorporated
The idea of specificity and clarity of argument
Admired
She had good arguments and points, I admired her decision in choice of argument and approach.
Sunday, April 24, 2016
Peer Review for Avalon Lubera
Time to give feedback really late in the game
Who: Avalon Lubera
What: Revised Post to Peer Reviewers
Activity: Copy Editing
Suggested to her to have more citations incorporated into her work to increase her credibility
Helped?
I think I helped her so hopefully she would have more credibility in her argument so people would listen to her.
Incorporated
Incorporated the importance of having credibility
Admire
I admire her choice of argument, it's a pretty important topic that needs more notice
Who: Avalon Lubera
What: Revised Post to Peer Reviewers
Activity: Copy Editing
Suggested to her to have more citations incorporated into her work to increase her credibility
Helped?
I think I helped her so hopefully she would have more credibility in her argument so people would listen to her.
Incorporated
Incorporated the importance of having credibility
Admire
I admire her choice of argument, it's a pretty important topic that needs more notice
Saturday, April 23, 2016
Reflection on Two Weeks
Not necessarily two weeks, but near enough, until the end of the school year, and isn't that terrifying.
Successes
Well I got everything pretty done, gonna check over the fine cut once more before I turn it in, but I think overall this was a really successful essay.
Challenges
Trying to find good arguments was the main challenge and trying to see what I could fix in the final paper through my own eyes is hard, since I think it sounds right.
The Future
Well I've got busy weeks ahead and the last project still to come, so I think while stressful, its so close to the end its best to just work it through
Feelings
I would say STRESS, is the main feel I got nowadays. But mostly not with this class
Successes
Well I got everything pretty done, gonna check over the fine cut once more before I turn it in, but I think overall this was a really successful essay.
Challenges
Trying to find good arguments was the main challenge and trying to see what I could fix in the final paper through my own eyes is hard, since I think it sounds right.
The Future
Well I've got busy weeks ahead and the last project still to come, so I think while stressful, its so close to the end its best to just work it through
Feelings
I would say STRESS, is the main feel I got nowadays. But mostly not with this class
Friday, April 22, 2016
Revised Post to Peer Reviewers
Well there's been some changes in the essay but not an exorbitant amount. Hopefully you enjoy it.
Key Info
I think I covered most the info in the last time that there was a peer review, I guess just remind people that this is a "hot topic" nowadays and very relevant.
Major Weakness
Not something I would classify as a major weakness, but some would; I have no true personal arguments in this paper. I feel as though within this issue, it is so often that personal stories are discounted and tossed aside, so while I still used some pathos, logos and ethos are my main arguments within the paper.
Major Strengths
A major strength within this work in my opinion is that I do have a lot of arguments to support my side while acknowledging the other side, if it is with a bit of derision for their views but whatevers.
Fine Cut
Key Info
I think I covered most the info in the last time that there was a peer review, I guess just remind people that this is a "hot topic" nowadays and very relevant.
Major Weakness
Not something I would classify as a major weakness, but some would; I have no true personal arguments in this paper. I feel as though within this issue, it is so often that personal stories are discounted and tossed aside, so while I still used some pathos, logos and ethos are my main arguments within the paper.
Major Strengths
A major strength within this work in my opinion is that I do have a lot of arguments to support my side while acknowledging the other side, if it is with a bit of derision for their views but whatevers.
Fine Cut
Thursday, April 21, 2016
Editorial Report B
This editorial post is a bigger one because it's a completely newly added paragraph? Look how shiny and fresh the words and arguments are!
Selection From Rough Cut
--------------------------------------------------------------------
| There's nothing here! |
--------------------------------------------------------------------
Re-Edited Selection
New words seem to scare people when they have to address how new they truly are, and yet they don’t realize how quickly and how often a new word or phrase will become part of everyday speech. How quickly did the use of Twitter and talking with internet lingo catch on, so quickly that words that were made only months before; “on fleek”, the concept of “Netflix and Chill” and the like were nominated along with “they” for word of the year (Guo). The reason such words catch on so quickly is popularity, the words were used en masse by some that others would become interested in and begin to repeat, to the point that it is accepted easily. If the concern is that it is “too hard” linguistically to pick up a new word with which to address someone, then it’s actually the person is unwilling to make the change; gender classifications in language are not what one would think, that there are male and female and perhaps neuter, gender classifications in language actually have very little to do with biological genders, gender classifications can be from none, to twenty different “gender classifications” (Curzan). These have nothing to do with gender, and should not be used in argument for pronouns, a linguistic argument quickly falls through when trying to find reasons against the use of a gender neutral pronoun in general, especially against the use of the pronoun “they”.
Content Change
Well this was an addition of new arguments, how new words are accepted into languages all the time and how exactly gender in linguistics does not have anything to do with pronouns or actual gender. I think it lends more logical weight to my argument
Form Change
Well It's a new paragraph, so I added like a paragraph to the entire work, and moved everything else down like an entire page.
Selection From Rough Cut
--------------------------------------------------------------------
| There's nothing here! |
--------------------------------------------------------------------
Re-Edited Selection
New words seem to scare people when they have to address how new they truly are, and yet they don’t realize how quickly and how often a new word or phrase will become part of everyday speech. How quickly did the use of Twitter and talking with internet lingo catch on, so quickly that words that were made only months before; “on fleek”, the concept of “Netflix and Chill” and the like were nominated along with “they” for word of the year (Guo). The reason such words catch on so quickly is popularity, the words were used en masse by some that others would become interested in and begin to repeat, to the point that it is accepted easily. If the concern is that it is “too hard” linguistically to pick up a new word with which to address someone, then it’s actually the person is unwilling to make the change; gender classifications in language are not what one would think, that there are male and female and perhaps neuter, gender classifications in language actually have very little to do with biological genders, gender classifications can be from none, to twenty different “gender classifications” (Curzan). These have nothing to do with gender, and should not be used in argument for pronouns, a linguistic argument quickly falls through when trying to find reasons against the use of a gender neutral pronoun in general, especially against the use of the pronoun “they”.
Content Change
Well this was an addition of new arguments, how new words are accepted into languages all the time and how exactly gender in linguistics does not have anything to do with pronouns or actual gender. I think it lends more logical weight to my argument
Form Change
Well It's a new paragraph, so I added like a paragraph to the entire work, and moved everything else down like an entire page.
Editorial Report A
The end is near.
Selection From Rough Cut
The above interaction probably would not draw attention as being out of the ordinary in an everyday conversation. However, some people seem to think that using they as a singular pronoun is incorrect, and should not be used when referring to a person one knows. Much of this argument is rising from the surge of visibility for trans, genderqueer, and nonbinary individuals; who may not particularly like being addressed by a gendered pronoun such as he or she. The English language has no real neutral pronoun that some other languages have, like the use of "hen" in Sweden and Norway (Vindenes). So it was proposed that the pronoun "they", which is already used in daily speech to address a person of some unspecified gender, should fill this role. And yet, while generally accepted, there are still those who want to argue that it shouldn’t be used, or that we don’t even need such pronouns. My argument is that "they" should become the prescribed gender neutral pronoun used in English, and that whatever pronouns a person would like to be addressed with should be accepted and used.
Re-Edited Selection
The above interaction probably would not draw attention as being out of the ordinary in an everyday conversation. Despite this many believe that using “they” as a singular pronoun is incorrect, and should not be used when referring to someone one knows personally. Much of this argument is rising from the surge of visibility for trans, genderqueer, and nonbinary individuals in the LGBT+ community and in the world as whole; who may not particularly like being addressed by a gendered pronoun such as “he” or “she”. The English language has no real neutral pronoun that some other languages have, like the use of "hen" in Swedish and Norwegian (Vindenes). So it was unofficially proposed that the pronoun "they", which is already used in daily speech to address a person of some unspecified gender, should fill this role in English. And yet, while generally accepted, there are still those who want to argue that it shouldn’t be used, or that we don’t even need such pronouns. My argument is that "they" should become the prescribed singular gender neutral pronoun used in English, and that whatever pronouns a person would like to be addressed with should be accepted and used.
Content Change
The content that this went through, was a little more inclusion on who this subject effects, like yes specificaly the queer community but also the rest of people too. Also I made sure to not make it sound like there was an official proposal on the use of "they" but more of a, everyone started using it thing
Form Change
There wasn't really any form change, still and essay and all.
Selection From Rough Cut
The above interaction probably would not draw attention as being out of the ordinary in an everyday conversation. However, some people seem to think that using they as a singular pronoun is incorrect, and should not be used when referring to a person one knows. Much of this argument is rising from the surge of visibility for trans, genderqueer, and nonbinary individuals; who may not particularly like being addressed by a gendered pronoun such as he or she. The English language has no real neutral pronoun that some other languages have, like the use of "hen" in Sweden and Norway (Vindenes). So it was proposed that the pronoun "they", which is already used in daily speech to address a person of some unspecified gender, should fill this role. And yet, while generally accepted, there are still those who want to argue that it shouldn’t be used, or that we don’t even need such pronouns. My argument is that "they" should become the prescribed gender neutral pronoun used in English, and that whatever pronouns a person would like to be addressed with should be accepted and used.
Re-Edited Selection
The above interaction probably would not draw attention as being out of the ordinary in an everyday conversation. Despite this many believe that using “they” as a singular pronoun is incorrect, and should not be used when referring to someone one knows personally. Much of this argument is rising from the surge of visibility for trans, genderqueer, and nonbinary individuals in the LGBT+ community and in the world as whole; who may not particularly like being addressed by a gendered pronoun such as “he” or “she”. The English language has no real neutral pronoun that some other languages have, like the use of "hen" in Swedish and Norwegian (Vindenes). So it was unofficially proposed that the pronoun "they", which is already used in daily speech to address a person of some unspecified gender, should fill this role in English. And yet, while generally accepted, there are still those who want to argue that it shouldn’t be used, or that we don’t even need such pronouns. My argument is that "they" should become the prescribed singular gender neutral pronoun used in English, and that whatever pronouns a person would like to be addressed with should be accepted and used.
Content Change
The content that this went through, was a little more inclusion on who this subject effects, like yes specificaly the queer community but also the rest of people too. Also I made sure to not make it sound like there was an official proposal on the use of "they" but more of a, everyone started using it thing
Form Change
There wasn't really any form change, still and essay and all.
Sunday, April 17, 2016
Peer Review for Emily Bond
Who
Emily Bond
What
Open Post to Peer Reviewers
What Activity
I made both content and form suggestions
For form I gave her some ideas on how to make her QRG a bit more set up like a QRG, and with the content suggestion tried to give ideas on how to make her argument a bit more argumentative.
Helped?
I think I helped fairly well since she had questions and I tried to answer them to the best of my abilities in regards to her project
Incorporation
Incorporated the idea of specificity in her arguments
Admirable
Emily's work was really well structured and thought out, and overall had a very finished quality to it which so early before final production is good for her with final edits.
Peer Review for Sarah Hansen
Who
Sarah Hansen
What
Open Post to Peer Reviewers
What Activity
Make a content suggestion
I made the suggestion that Sarah needed to add more credible sources to make her argument more solid, along with that trying to use less biased language so it doesn't just sound like an attack on Trump.
Helped?
I hope so. She has good premise just needs a lot of refining
Incorporation
Incorporated sort of the need to address counter argument and ensuring that it is not just sounding like an angry rant.
Admirable
It's admirable that Sarah was open enough to share a very personal story within the work, it strongly increases the amount of pathos she generates as well as generally being a super brave thing to do.
Saturday, April 16, 2016
Reflection on a Surprising Lack of Stress
I'm totally kicking ass today in getting this stuff done
Successes
A big success again this week is actually getting things done at a good time, practically early in my scheme of work, along with that I actually think I found more usable sources to back up points made within the work.
Challenges
Trying not to sound like a know-it-all within my writing, or being overly rude. I hope I soothe any ruffled feathers while at the same time still making a point that ruffled feathers aren't my concern.
Past the Point of No Concern
I have so many big projects pretty much culminating in this week, as well as like, trying to have a social life. But I think since I managed everything well enough this week that next week will be just fine, if a little pressed.
Feels
Overall, This might be my best project. Something I actually will like post elsewhere probably.
Successes
A big success again this week is actually getting things done at a good time, practically early in my scheme of work, along with that I actually think I found more usable sources to back up points made within the work.
Challenges
Trying not to sound like a know-it-all within my writing, or being overly rude. I hope I soothe any ruffled feathers while at the same time still making a point that ruffled feathers aren't my concern.
Past the Point of No Concern
I have so many big projects pretty much culminating in this week, as well as like, trying to have a social life. But I think since I managed everything well enough this week that next week will be just fine, if a little pressed.
Feels
Overall, This might be my best project. Something I actually will like post elsewhere probably.
Open Post to Peer Reviewers
Here's the Rough Copy so far, I hope you enjoy it and please, I implore you to give me feedback.
Anticipations
Based on how much I got done this week so far, I have high hopes for how much I'll be able to get done to finished everything up as well as high hopes for how well final editing will go ultimately.
Key Info
Information that may be important for you to know; this subject is close to my heart, as most dealing with the queer community are, I've tried not to argue from that perspective in the work, making it more about grammar and general courtesy to other humans and not something on the "gay agenda"
Weaknesses
A weakness that may be apparent is that I have a strong opinion on the subject and worry that I have not addressed the counter arguments to this idea properly, or in depth enough, also I never truly found good sources for the counterargument side.
Strengths
Essays are my best genre to work in, I have a god mastery on how they will sound and be read, and taken by the people reading them. Hopefully that will work for me and make it sound more credible ultimately.
Rough Copy
Anticipations
Based on how much I got done this week so far, I have high hopes for how much I'll be able to get done to finished everything up as well as high hopes for how well final editing will go ultimately.
Key Info
Information that may be important for you to know; this subject is close to my heart, as most dealing with the queer community are, I've tried not to argue from that perspective in the work, making it more about grammar and general courtesy to other humans and not something on the "gay agenda"
Weaknesses
A weakness that may be apparent is that I have a strong opinion on the subject and worry that I have not addressed the counter arguments to this idea properly, or in depth enough, also I never truly found good sources for the counterargument side.
Strengths
Essays are my best genre to work in, I have a god mastery on how they will sound and be read, and taken by the people reading them. Hopefully that will work for me and make it sound more credible ultimately.
Rough Copy
Editorial Report B
Closer and closer to being something final and usable
Selection from Rough Cut
A large part of the argument that one hears against using they as the singular third person gender neutral pronoun is that it is “grammatically incorrect”. And primarily the people arguing such things would be incorrect; they is used daily in conversation towards a single person when one does not know their gender, so why couldn’t it be moved towards when using it for someone you do know their gender, just that their gender does not fit into the binary that English seems to demand with its complete lack of regard towards a third person singular without a gender.
Re-edited Selection
A large part of the argument that one hears against using "they" as the singular third person gender neutral pronoun in English is that it is “grammatically incorrect”. And primarily the people arguing such things would be incorrect; "they" is used daily in conversation towards a single person when one does not know their gender, so why couldn’t it be moved towards when using it for someone one does know personally and their gender just does not fit into the forced binary of he and she. While sometimes using "they" can lead to ambiguity in language, so can using he or she, and contextual evidence will always lead a reader or even listener to know about who is being addressed. "They" is also not a "new fad" in any sense, in fact, historically it has been used since Shakespeare and Chaucer (Doyle). As well as being grammatical, English is actually strange for its gender system of pronouns in a linguistic sense; most languages in the family of Indo-European descent, which English resides in, have a system of neuter pronouns along with the masculine and feminine ones (Curzan). It would make more sense grammatically for the inclusion of one, whether the one we already have or a newer one, If the concern for the ambiguity of using "they" was really as much of an issue as those against the use of it make it out to be, then that would merely support the need for the acceptance of other, newer singular pronouns.
Content Change
The content that was changed in this was the inclusion of historical examples of how grammatical using "they" is, as well as linguistic examples for how the inclusion of a neutral pronoun would actually make more sense.
Form Change
The changes in form in this case were the inclusion of sources once again for some more ethical appeal, as well as what the sources are showing is a logical appeal of linguistic and historical sense. Using also historically great, or looked up to writers, helps encourage the want of people who respect such things more likely to agree with the argument.
Selection from Rough Cut
A large part of the argument that one hears against using they as the singular third person gender neutral pronoun is that it is “grammatically incorrect”. And primarily the people arguing such things would be incorrect; they is used daily in conversation towards a single person when one does not know their gender, so why couldn’t it be moved towards when using it for someone you do know their gender, just that their gender does not fit into the binary that English seems to demand with its complete lack of regard towards a third person singular without a gender.
Re-edited Selection
A large part of the argument that one hears against using "they" as the singular third person gender neutral pronoun in English is that it is “grammatically incorrect”. And primarily the people arguing such things would be incorrect; "they" is used daily in conversation towards a single person when one does not know their gender, so why couldn’t it be moved towards when using it for someone one does know personally and their gender just does not fit into the forced binary of he and she. While sometimes using "they" can lead to ambiguity in language, so can using he or she, and contextual evidence will always lead a reader or even listener to know about who is being addressed. "They" is also not a "new fad" in any sense, in fact, historically it has been used since Shakespeare and Chaucer (Doyle). As well as being grammatical, English is actually strange for its gender system of pronouns in a linguistic sense; most languages in the family of Indo-European descent, which English resides in, have a system of neuter pronouns along with the masculine and feminine ones (Curzan). It would make more sense grammatically for the inclusion of one, whether the one we already have or a newer one, If the concern for the ambiguity of using "they" was really as much of an issue as those against the use of it make it out to be, then that would merely support the need for the acceptance of other, newer singular pronouns.
Content Change
The content that was changed in this was the inclusion of historical examples of how grammatical using "they" is, as well as linguistic examples for how the inclusion of a neutral pronoun would actually make more sense.
Form Change
The changes in form in this case were the inclusion of sources once again for some more ethical appeal, as well as what the sources are showing is a logical appeal of linguistic and historical sense. Using also historically great, or looked up to writers, helps encourage the want of people who respect such things more likely to agree with the argument.
Subscribe to:
Posts (Atom)